monte stories–revision notes

The projects Highland Stories and Little Lolo Stories are pretty much done which means Monte Stories and the Cornbread project need to get fully drafted this summer. I am a week and a half away from some time to focus on my own work and I need to get a revision plan down. I remember when Jenny Cornell assigned this for the Highland Stories. It was tremendously helpful. So I do it now out of habit. Here is what I came up with:

Monte Stories:


  • Carlos Stories–intro of family and Carlos and necessity for these stories

Section 1–sets up community, village ideals, gossip, infidelities of marriage and friendship

  • San Luis
  • South Fork
  • Felipa
  • Pifanio
  • Carlos and Pifanio
  • Delores
  • Pifanio and Felipa
  • Pifanio’s Wives
  • Felipa Pregnant
  • *Church Community*

Section 2–follows Carlos’ downfall, crash sites, drinking and reliance on Lena

  • Carlos Unexplained Sighting
  • Carlos and the Sugar
  • Felipa’s Pregnancy
  • Carlos’ Foreclosure
  • Carlos and Felipa Trip to Market
  • *more argument in market*
  • Daughter’s Trip Home

Section 3–Carlos’ background, Felipa’s regret, motherhood

  • Carlos Back in his Day–maybe move to previous section?
  • Felipa Haunts Lena
  • *more Felipa following Lena and Bruna
  • Carlos Without Felipa
  • Carlos’ Amputation
  • *more with Carlos’ reaction in hospital

Section 4–future monte stories, lost monte stories, lost family, loss of community, future?

  • Lena Visits Felipa and Carlos
  • Lena’s Kitchen
  • *Future in Lena’s Kitchen?
  • *?

some editorial comment

Hey there John,

How’s it going? I just read the short story you submitted. I regret to say that “Dual Purpose Belt” didn’t make the final cut for Zygote in my Coffee. However, i dig your style, so please feel free to zap us more work for future consideration.

All the best,
~Brian Fugett (editor/Zygote in my Coffee)