(Tentatively I have reorganized the chapters. I have them here lettered and numbered but I’ll lose all that–I just need them to keep track of them. I was so glad to hear Martha Miller echo the same problems with remembereing names and places.
In terms of the revision, I spent the last three days looking at sentence level issues–I hate that. I still have content issues in several of the chapters as some are stronger than others. I have movied some things around so that the ist person narrative comes early to establish the narration and point of story. I wanted to save it but now I see I have to do this to make it clear the focus of the book is Lolo and Relles’ son as the narrator years inthe future, imagining and trying to figure out what happened to the family.)
Little Lolo Stories
I.
1. Rabbit Story—1st person and Lolo and idea of notebook and collecting of stories
2. the Lapping of Milk—introduces little Lolo and his younger attitude as soft/unique
3. Strange Tattoos—Lolo—idea of tattoos and Lolo out finding snakes
4. the Breaking of Wrists—Lolo—Lolo riding around the neighborhood after dark
5. Boy’s Play—snow days
6. Las Dias-family—end of section that shows Dec celebration on Spruce
II.
7. the Crew of Fosters—
8. the Jefe’s Lists—Jefe in dr’s office and worried about bills—background of moving to CO
9. the Jefe’s Work—Jefe in front yard and time off from mill—Lolo and lawn work
10. the Multi Purpose Belt—Jefe and discipline
11. the Jefe in Burma–Jefe
12. Lolo and the Neighborhood—Lolo home alone and Jefe and Jefita out to fosters
13. Chickens—Lolo
14. the Bear–Jefita
15. the Dog–Jefita
16. Driven to the Fields—Lolo and Jefe
III.
17. -intro of Mitedio and idea of Coco
18-22. Juanita’s Boy–Mitedio
23. Mitedio and His Boys—Mitedio playing with boys as Jefe works on cars
24. Mitedio Returns from Korea–Mitedio
25. Mitedio Put Out–Mitedio
26. Mitedio’s Fishing Trips–Mitedio
27. Mitedio’s Fight–Mitedio
28. Rock in the Beans–Family
29. Relles’s Skull–Lolo
30. Jefita Pregnant–Jefita
31. News of Mitedio—
IV.
32.-33. Jefita in Colorado Springs
34. Jefe’s Hunting
35. Jefe Returns
36. the Fight
37. Jefe’s Stitches
38. Mitedio Calls
39.-40. Colorado State Penitentiary
41-42. Jefe Arrested
43. Jefe Interviewed
44.-45. Boys in New Mexico
46. Jefe Plays
V. the House of Order
These don’t match my notes, but I think you have to go with what you think, not what I think. We can talk about it in person.